“Computer addicts”, that’s what my family call me instead of my name. I always begin my day turning on my computer checking my emails and facebooks. As internet exploded these days, providing many information and entertainment faster and quicker, it became number one source of my entertainment. This essay will talk about the problem that I get from the computer addiction. For example my school grade going down, communication with people have been reduced and health problems caused by computer addiction, and find that one of the solution to the problem is to set the time to play computer.
One of the problems is my school grades are going down. I spent average 10 hours to play computer. As a result I’m not able to finish my homework or to study for test. Also I can’t concentrate on class studies, because I always dreaming about games. I found some solutions to this problem. According to Hub pages.com (HUB Pages) setting the boundaries to play computer is one of the solution. To get rid out from this problem I slowly decreased the time I use the computer and later set time, like 1~2 hours maximum for entertainment. I also ask help from my family to control me from playing computer. This solution is very effective because I don’t have to spend a lot of money to seek for professional advisor.
Another problem is the health problem that I get from computer addiction. I was not able to sleep well, and my eye sight became bad, and also I gain weight. To solve this problem, helpguide.org (Help Guide) stated that try to replace the playing computer time to play sports or do healthy activities. By involving many activities with friends I can solve the problem as well as increase the communication with friends.
However, there were some solutions that I’ve done and it weren’t successful. One of them was to just to stop using the computer, but sudden change in time of playing computer made me more addict to it. While setting the time boundaries allowed me to get more friends at school, able to finish my work on time, and grew many skills by replacing activities instead of playing computer. (HUB Pages) therefore, slowly decreasing the time and setting the time to play computer is the best way to solve computer addiction.
Bibliography:
Help Guide Organization: Internet Addiction Signs, Symptoms, Treatment and Self-Help. http://www.helpguide.org/mantal/internet_cybersex_addiction.htm.
Found on september 20, 2010
Hubpages: For Parents of Addicts or Addicts Themselves. http://hubpages.com/hub/computer-Game-Addiction---Parents--Preventions-and-solution. Found on September 20, 2010.
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ReplyDeleteThe content of this essay is very well organized, the thesis statement is clear the introduction, body, and conclusion is separated well. The bibliography is stated.
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You did a good job Lee! (except for a few misspelled words) You get 10!
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